每周 A 档作文 · W41(周五 10/16)· U3《To be a good learner》学会学习
对应周次:W41(10/12-10/18,U3 Grammar + Word power 周)
对应章节:Module 1 · U3 To be a good learner(学会学习)
核心语法:副词比较级/最高级(more carefully / much better)+ 反身代词(by myself / teach myself)+ keep doing + 职业词缀句(play an important role in / chances for sb to do)
当周素材:作文素材库/U3_Good_learner_素材库.md(12 句,本篇用到 9/28-10/16 精华句)
字数:约 125 词(江苏中考要求 不少于 90 词,达标且有余量)
档位目标:A 档(内容集中 · 用词高级 · 句式多样 · 语法准确 · 总-分-总 3 段)
话题说明:W39 已写《My way to be a good learner》(方法介绍),本篇换角度写"我的进步"(我进步了)——同单元不同切面,用 Grammar 的副词比较级做主线。
🎯 一、作文题目
I Am Becoming a Better Learner(我正在成为更好的学习者)
提示:描述你英语学习上的进步——过去怎样、现在怎样,用了哪些方法,并表达你继续努力的愿望。
✍️ 二、A 档范文 · 中英逐句对照
共 8 句 · 总-分-总 3 段 · 约 125 词 | 网页端可一键「隐藏中文 / 隐藏英文」自测背诵
| 段落 | 英文 | 中文 | ✨ 亮点 |
|---|---|---|---|
| 🟦 总起 | Last term, I did quite badly in English, so I made a study plan and began to change myself. | 上学期我英语学得相当差,所以我制定了学习计划,开始改变自己。 | did badly(副词)| so 结果句 | make a study plan |
| 🟩 展开 | First, I listen more carefully than before and take notes by myself. | 首先,我比以前听课更认真,并自己记笔记。 | 副词比较级 + than | by myself 反身代词 |
| 🟩 展开 | Second, I teach myself English by reading English stories, because I am curious about the world. | 其次,我通过读英文故事自学英语,因为我对世界充满好奇。 | teach oneself | by + doing | be curious about |
| 🟩 展开 | When I meet difficult words, I never stop trying. | 遇到难词时,我从不停止尝试。 | when 时间状语从句 | stop doing(doing 是被停掉的动作) |
| 🟩 展开 | Third, I keep developing my skills as a writer, because writing plays an important role in learning a language. | 第三,我不断提高自己作为写作者的技能,因为写作在学习一门语言中起着重要作用。 | keep + V-ing | skills as a writer | play an important role in(10/16 新学) |
| 🟩 展开 | The more I practise, the better I write. | 我练得越多,写得越好。 | The + 比较级 …, the + 比较级 …(10/12 Grammar) |
| 🟨 总结 | Now I am doing much better in English than before, and my English is becoming better and better. | 现在我的英语比以前好多了,而且正在变得越来越好。 | much + 比较级(修饰语)| 比较级 + and + 比较级 |
| 🟨 总结 | I believe there will be more and more chances for people who keep learning! | 我相信,坚持学习的人会有越来越多的机会! | 宾语从句(省略 that)| chances for sb(10/16 新学)| who 定语从句 |
🔗 关联词运用:so / because / when / First-Second-Third / and —— 层次词 + 因果衔接,结构清晰。
📖 三、整篇连读(朗读 / 抄写用)
英文
Last term, I did quite badly in English, so I made a study plan and began to change myself.
First, I listen more carefully than before and take notes by myself. Second, I teach myself English by reading English stories, because I am curious about the world. When I meet difficult words, I never stop trying. Third, I keep developing my skills as a writer, because writing plays an important role in learning a language. The more I practise, the better I write.
Now I am doing much better in English than before, and my English is becoming better and better. I believe there will be more and more chances for people who keep learning!
中文
上学期我英语学得相当差,所以我制定了学习计划,开始改变自己。
首先,我比以前听课更认真,并自己记笔记。其次,我通过读英文故事自学英语,因为我对世界充满好奇。遇到难词时,我从不停止尝试。第三,我不断提高自己作为写作者的技能,因为写作在学习一门语言中起着重要作用。我练得越多,写得越好。
现在我的英语比以前好多了,而且正在变得越来越好。我相信,坚持学习的人会有越来越多的机会!
🔗 四、当周知识点 & 素材对照(逐句标注出处)
| 本文句子 | 对应当周知识点 | 对应素材库/笔记句子 |
|---|---|---|
| make a study plan / begin to change myself | make a study plan | Welcome 短语 #19 |
| listen more carefully than before / much better | 副词比较级 + than · much 修饰比较级 | Grammar §3.1/§3.4(10/12 笔记) |
| take notes by myself / teach myself | 反身代词 by oneself · teach oneself sth | Grammar §4.3 搭配(10/12 笔记) |
| teach myself English by reading English stories | teach oneself + by doing | U3 素材第 1 天(9/30 仿写句) |
| I am curious about the world | be curious about | U3 素材第 2 天(10/8) |
| I never stop trying | stop doing(doing = 停掉的动作) | Welcome 短语 #18 |
| keep developing my skills as a writer | keep + V-ing · skills as a… | U3 素材第 4 天句子 1(10/16 新录) |
| writing plays an important role in learning | play an important role in + V-ing | U3 素材第 4 天句子 2(10/16 新录) |
| The more I practise, the better I write | The + 比较级, the + 比较级 | Grammar §3.3 句型 5(10/12 笔记) |
| better and better | 比较级 + and + 比较级 | Grammar §3.3 句型 6(10/12 笔记) |
| more and more chances for people who keep learning | chances for sb to do 变体 + who 定语从句 | U3 素材第 4 天句子 3(10/16 新录) |
🏆 五、为什么这是 A 档(评分要点)
| A 档维度 | 本文体现 |
|---|---|
| 内容(8-10 句,集中) | 3 段共 8 句,全部围绕"我的进步",前后对比结构完整,不偏题 |
| 用词(高级替换) | change myself / curious / keep developing / play an important role / chances 替换 study hard / good |
| 句式(复合句) | because / when / so 复合句 + who 定语从句 + The more…the better |
| 语法(基本无误) | 副词比较级(more carefully / much better)、反身代词(by myself / teach myself)、stop doing、keep doing 全准确 |
| 段落(总-分-总) | 总起(过去差 → 下决心)→ 展开(三个方法)→ 总结(现在进步 + 展望) |
| 字数(≥90) | 约 125 词,达标 |
家长/孩子用法:先读范文 1 遍 → 网页端「隐藏英文」试着口头复述 → 抄写 1 遍(练书写)→ 注意本篇和 W39《My way to be a good learner》是同单元两副面孔:一篇写"方法",一篇写"进步",考试遇到哪个题都能套。